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Post by Lady Jessie on Jan 29, 2006 21:22:29 GMT -5
Erm, yeah, review my story "Our pool has overflown" here. -Note- This was acctually started by Mistress Emma, who can not be bothered to log into her own account.
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Post by Lady Jessie on Jan 30, 2006 5:34:57 GMT -5
I know. I was like, " EMMA!!! " and stuff. Yeah. Erm to start with rain is not typical Melbourne weather. REALLEH FREEZING COLD OMG-I'M-DYING- weather is typical. Rain is rare 'cause of the drought. ;D Er, and some paragraphs could really be appreciated. Like... er, take following example! Er, yeah. ;D And also, grammar is awesome. You should be going, "OMG GRAMMAR I LUFF YOU. ", not "Erm... I don't know you very well really. ". Here is a list of awesome grammatical points to remember: - At the end of a line of dialogue, if there is a "Mr Snuffly said." or something similar otherwise, and the line of dialogue would end in a full stop, then you use a comma instead.
- If you have a tag at the end that does not start with a name (ie. "said Mr Snuffly.") then the "said" should not be capitalised.
- Lines of dialogue ALWAYS start with a capital letter.
- You never have a comma before the end of dialogue and then a full stop straightaway. You just have the full stop. ^^
Whee. Vereh grammatical. Erm... and continue your story, I guess? I want to see if it gets any more original, because at the moment it's sounding eerily like this story I wrote in grade three...
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Post by Queen Shannykins on Jan 30, 2006 18:05:27 GMT -5
...What your sister said about the grammar. xD; Contiue this! ! -huggles-
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Post by Mistress Izzy on Feb 12, 2006 17:37:34 GMT -5
Well, I think it is good. Grammar doesn't matter to me so much, as long as you have speech marks, capital letters and full stops. Continue!
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Post by Lady Jessie on Feb 15, 2006 17:20:40 GMT -5
EMMA SAID IT WAS A ONE-SHOT. It does not even remotely sound like a one-shot. Blah.
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