Tala's Dream [reviews]

Lady Jessie
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The pedant strikes again!

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Tala's Dream [reviews] Sept 30, 2006 3:50:10 GMT -5

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Post by Lady Jessie on Sept 30, 2006 3:50:10 GMT -5

This is an English essay from last year. You can review it here! (Er, duh.)

Just so you know, I think it could be a looooot better. I mean, what's up with "said commandingly"? What's wrong with "commanded"?

But yeah, if I edited a little more, it'd be great.

Why do the umpires hate us so much?

Mistress Emma The Mistresses and Masters I'm weird. And obsessive. And hypo. 'Cause I'm just cool like that. ;D Posts: 4,536	Tala's Dream [reviews] Sept 30, 2006 3:55:23 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Mistress Emma on Sept 30, 2006 3:55:23 GMT -5 -nod- It's unique. Very interesting.
	"And the preps start on the 32nd of January" ~Me "They look like hats with wheels" "Mr. Morgan, he insulted my work! He said they looked like hats with wheels!" "To be more specific, they look like Mexican hats with wheels..." ~Tom C/Tamara/Mr. Morgan My Comic Sucks: www.drunkduck.com/My_Comic_Sucks/index.php?p=79387

Lady Jessie The Ladies and Lords Time Lady The pedant strikes again! Posts: 152	Tala's Dream [reviews] Sept 30, 2006 3:56:23 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lady Jessie on Sept 30, 2006 3:56:23 GMT -5 mistressemma said: -nod- It's unique. Very interesting. Thank you.
	Why do the umpires hate us so much?

Mistress Emma The Mistresses and Masters I'm weird. And obsessive. And hypo. 'Cause I'm just cool like that. ;D Posts: 4,536	Tala's Dream [reviews] Sept 30, 2006 4:04:19 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Mistress Emma on Sept 30, 2006 4:04:19 GMT -5 Your welcome. :3
	"And the preps start on the 32nd of January" ~Me "They look like hats with wheels" "Mr. Morgan, he insulted my work! He said they looked like hats with wheels!" "To be more specific, they look like Mexican hats with wheels..." ~Tom C/Tamara/Mr. Morgan My Comic Sucks: www.drunkduck.com/My_Comic_Sucks/index.php?p=79387

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